What Happens When Alex Gets Bored Of Spriting

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[Fallen Angel]

Well, I will ditto my comment in your story thread.

Nevertheless, they are nice

[Maverick]

...Thanks.

[OnewingedAngel]

Very nice. Um..wow.

[Fallen Angel]

Funny, when I read these, I see every story and poem I ever posted on FFQ all rolled into one...sorry, but thats what I see

[Maverick]

Same thing as I posted on my story thread.

[Dave]

As I've said before, you are a talented poet. Very good work.

[Maverick]

\^_^/

..again.

[Maverick]

I think I am going to take a break from poetry, okay?
I'm getting sick of writing and embarassing myself, so thats it for me.
Could someone lock this for me?

[Ares]

Why don't you keep this open so you can post in it later?

[Maverick]

I guess.

[Maverick]

Yeah, I am such an ass.
Whatever, this isn't poetry. I had a crap load of poems to post, but, Im an idiot, and forgot, they aren't in my C drive, they are on my desktop! So, now poetry, just this.

I haven't been able to get a hold of at all...
I know he isn't home but..I just keep thinking, and now my mind keeps wondering if his friend is a woman..and..they..
Don't say it.
Don't type it.
But I keep thinking it. Over and over again. Even Keane aren't helping. I want to know why he isn't respdonding...
Perhaps he is mad at me? Maybe he talked to someone, and someone told him...
But it was barely anything. I never even SAID it.
I just...dodged it elusively with a response.
I am really worried. What if something happened to him?!?
What if he...
Don't say it.
Don't type it.
But I keep thinking it...

[Maverick]

It's nighttime again.
And again I cannot sleep. I tell myself it is because I am not tired, but now, I would love to drift off into the comfort of my bed.
But..I am afraid. I think I am afraid that if I sleep, I will dream.
And if I dream, I will dream of...you.
I still remember the last one.
You held me close, and kissed me goodbye, on a snowy winter eve.
I still remember that night, and the time I recalled it in my sleep. But in my dream, you kissed me longer. And you didn't leave that night.
You stayed with me, and held me close all through the cold dark.
You laid next to me and wrapped your arms around me, snuggling into me, and my pillow.
We talked of life in the future, in a far away land, and life without people holding back our emotions for us.
And when the morning came, and the sun peeked through my window, you were still there, holding me close, afraid to let go.
I can't help but wonder, if things were different, if you would have stayed that night, if noone held you back.
If you weren't wrapped up in yourself, if you weren't scared to tell me you loved me..
Or..love me still..or even at all.

Every night, before she sleeps, She looks upon her ceiling.
And she sees a shadow, spread across her room.
The shapes of wings look back at her, and make her cry.
She will turn off the lights and close her blinds, till her room is a black hole.
But she can still see them.
Torturing her, from the back of her mind, and the front of her heart.

Well? I really want feedback on this..

[Dave]

How many times can I say the same thing. Excellent. Very nice job.

[Maverick]

^^

[ScienceFair]

I actually quite enjoyed the first one, the don't type it one...  Shows a good example of the worrying and sometimes jealous feelings and thoughts that can come when one does not know what is happening with their love...  Especially if they sorta know, but only some details.  That can be totally eakish... Good job...

The second post, I'm not sure is that actually two individual works?  You didn't really separate them but they don't appear to belong together so I'm assuming yes...

The first one in the second post... it's rather apparent the disappointment and possibly frustration that she feels...  though it wasn't as powerful as the first post's work.  In my opinion it's a little too wordy. As in, I think it would be better if many of the long lines weren't as long...

The one with the wings... well it's written well enough, I'm just not sure why that's all you wrote...  As it simply makes me think... why?  I mean, how often do people get haunted by wings? I suppose this being FFQ I shouldn't ask that question, but nevertheless...

Nice posts, I honestly enjoyed it.